boyparts

at beginning... boring for something that covers so many Saucy?? topics...

contemporary fiction thoughts...

boring... lack of voice..
tells not shows...

see what was trying to b done but didn't do it as well as couldve

the twists are twisting... im just thinking ok  . not whipped by it.

think a lot more little things could've been sewn into the unreliable narration. ..

v art school.. not in a good way .. those flop ppl that think they're doing smthn lol