FIELDS & FRAMES | writing the narrative

I wanted to create an Epic like poem to have over the sound. I had a brief idea of how i wanted it to look/sound. I wanted it to sound ethereal and storytelling like the narrative in The Velvet Goldmine, so to help writing it, i looked at different sources to try and form a stronger image of what i was writing.
Looked at the velvet goldmine script: https://www.springfieldspringfield.co.uk/movie_script.php?movie=velvet-goldmine
and the video I found online.

Then briefly remembered the lord of the rings (even though i don't think i've seen all the movies) opening monologue so looked at that.
Also:
remembered the david bowie song five years has a narrative structure.
https://genius.com/David-bowie-five-years-lyrics
and land by patti smith. looked at the lyrics and information on here:https://genius.com/Patti-smith-   land-horses-land-of-a-thousand-dances-la-mer-de-lyrics
mentioned how the songs includes references to Burroughs etc. This and 5 years inspired me to do cutups and also the reference to cut ups in my poem as I thought it suggests the reference to newspapers and that is what sometimes is used to make them.
O Superman by Laurie Anderson https://genius.com/Laurie-anderson-o-superman-for-massenet-lyrics
The American Prayer album was also a prominent inspiration from the beginning as it combines poetry and music.
the film Blue by Derek Jarman
Lady Godiva/Murder Mystery

thought about having it be set on the 30th january 3033 at 19:39 but i decided not to mention that in the final piece. Thought to call it 'the renaissance of the internet' and wanted to create a digital lexical field.

wrote some more notes.

thought about how i could reference the library of Alexandria to show the death of the information etc.

in 3rd person to give it an omniscient observing 'God' perspective.

find my best way at writing is to write stray lines and then piecing them together and using them as inspiration to fill in lines and work it that way.
went off her head was probably taken from 5 years lmaooo. A THIEF.

wrote it out as couplets and brainstormed for the second part

then typed it out.

Cut Ups
When re-reading my poem I thought it was pretty good, however I wasn't sure if i liked the repetition within the couplets as it seemed too cliche, and I originally wanted the poem to incorporate more rhythm/rhyme as it builds up. So since i used the term 'cut ups' in the poem i decided to actually try some. i was doubtful as to whether i would use it or if it would be any good but I thought it would at least be good to put on my blog, so I did it and it actually was super helpful.

cut ups gave me a fresh perspective on the form. I liked how it put all modality at the beginning as if to frame the rest and also how it split up the getting to her head part. This process allowed me to see lines that worked better with other lines.
I then rearranged some of it to how i think it worked better. I feel like there were natural stanzas that came out after the cuts ups like the way the future is the present part framed the stages left to perform on part. I did however thing it worked better with the stage line and then the audience line after it.
I took the 'Dead' line out, however as I was writing it up, I decided to put it back in again.

I then wrote it out again and came up with the build up bit. Writing it out also made me see things I wanted to change and what would work better. 

Final piece:

Alexandria the second is the personification of the internet and by referring to her as of the 21st Century highlights this. I also think it shows how the technological 'revolution' kind of begun at the beginning of the century.

 it'd been getting to her head' kinda wish it said went off her head as I like that it can mean both killed via execution or went crazy with delusions of grandeur. With the icarus line, I had the image of phrases from books, newspapers, etc being burnt and either them rising as ashes after being burnt, or going up to the sun and being burnt and coming back down, only now existing in the form of a memory. I think the whole thing to do with nazi book burning and also, obviously, the fire of Alexandria. 'Meaninglessness is the ultimate freedom' is something I wrote down from a comment on reddit so yeah, guess i kinda stole it. I didnt intend to write it in this piece as I just wrote it down after looking into 'good ways' to be nihilistic lol.

 I like the first two lines of this as it sums up how time is just Weird! The present is literally the past, only lasts a second, and the future is the present. Now I think about it it's like the phrase 'We are the Dead' in 1984, but i hadn't read that when i wrote this.
No stages left is about society and how these 'roles' are now non existent suggesting the collapse of society.

The first line is a collection of '-ist' words, i guess. Kind of funny, but also references to how i joked to my friend about how the utopia exists after the dystopia where everything is gone and there's no pressure to do anything anymore. I googled what the smell of petrol smell was called and its benezene and then i added petrichor on the end as they go well together. I then added 'huffing' because i think it adds an extremity that makes it almost comical, like the first line of the stanza.

I wanted to mention apples as one of the main technological company right now is apple, and also i think it sort of alludes to the beginning of things with adam and eve and also nature/growth. The fact that they rot in trees says that they die before even falling.

1st line is about how there's nothing left so you can't be existential in a dystopia as i don't think the world could sink any lower. I wrote the cut ups bit before mentioning Tabloids as I think newspapers are heavily related to the circulation of news, propaganda, etc, and cut ups are often done by using newspapers.

Ancient Polyvinyl Chloride is about plastic. I googled what the name of the non-reusable plastic was and then stuck 'ancient' on the front to make it sound almost cherished like a museum of readymades but of trash from years ago.

I thought of going into more detail to make it more about art culture/museums and how we look at the past and but frames around things or whatever, if that makes sense?

The last two lines lead up to the next stanza, with a reference to a brand and the newspapers which kind of make up our contemporary culture and also the saying is '6 feet' under, however i added the zero to make it sound more 'ancient'.

The old values being consumerism. I liked the line about the dead chains as it's sort of eerie. I was unsure whether to have 'Graveyard of Modernity; or have it as a possessive way with 'Modernity's Graveyard'. The first shows the death of the culture as a whole whereas the latter suggests that modernity caused the graveyard. I eventually decided to go with the former.

This is the build up section, which I wanted to be different to the rest. The reason why I didnt like the rhyming in the first section is becasue i wanted to explicitly use more rhyme in this section to create more of a buildup. Also changed the perspective to 2nd person to involve the spectator in the narrative, rather than creating a character with it's own identity which would take everything away. i felt.
The lines get shorter as it goes on which also adds to this atmosphere.
I wanted to create an atmosphere where you could feel something there in instinctual thing where you can feel something around you. Like a faint beeping and slowly it leads you to un-burying this 'energy' which is the internet in metaphorical terms.
The 'there's something on your back' is deadass a doctor who reference. Not sorry about it !
Amazonian is a Play On Words of Amazon... so much packaging. honeSTly.